Critical Miss

Rummaging around in the bottom of my hard drive* last night, I cme across a short story I wrote about 6-7 years ago. Overall, I'm not sure it's that good and the plot is quite signposted, but I thought I'd post it here and see what you lot thought of it.

( Critical Miss )

^{* And not rummaging around in my bottom. That was a long time ago, when I was young and needed the money.}